Need serious revision based on my draft and make it a perfect final draft

It needs serious revision based on my draft and reach 6 pages(I already have 5 pages but some need to be deleted and revise). The instructor required this draft to have more argument, not just descriptive like what I did. So it need serious change!! and there are some article can build this paper: Thomas L. Friedman，”Still Not Tired“ Cathy Young， Lessons from World War II Joseph Nye, JR ，“Zakaria’s World My argument is about the united states government should not intervene the issue of South China Sea. one idea is american military should not help the countries in the south china sea to be able to agiast China.