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Breaching Sacred Ground: The Dakota Access Pipeline Nabeel Ali RG ST 14: Introduction to Native American Religion Date Breaching Sacred Ground: The Dakota Access Pipeline Almost every person on earth has a form of attachment to some specific traditional religious practices. Even though most traditional spiritual practices have been slowly replaced by the mainstream religions such as Christianity Buddhism Islam as well as Atheist religions among others some tribes have sustained their old traditional religious practices to this day. Native Americans were the first people to have lived in America before America’s intervention by colonialist. The first group of invaders to occupy the American continent included the Spanish French Portuguese English and Dutch. Native American religion had many tribes that practiced its faith. Even though almost every tribe had their own beliefs they all had some common aspects. Native American religion focused more on nature’s connection with humans. The of Life ​.​ ​Tsaile: ​ ​Navajo ​ ​Community ​ ​College ​ ​Press ​ ​1995. Berry ​ ​Thomas. ​ ​​The ​ ​Dream ​ ​of ​ ​the ​ ​Earth ​.​ ​Berkeley: ​ ​Counterpoint ​ ​2015. Bierhorst ​ ​John. ​ ​​The ​ ​Way ​ ​of ​ ​the ​ ​Earth: ​ ​Native ​ ​America ​ ​and​ ​the ​ ​Environment ​.​ ​New ​ ​York: William ​ ​Morrow ​ ​1995. Grounds ​ ​Richard A. Native ​ ​Voices: ​ ​American ​ ​Indian ​ ​Identity ​ ​and​ ​Resistance ​ ​ ​edited ​ ​by​ ​George ​ ​E. ​ ​Tinker ​ ​and ​ ​David ​ ​E. ​ ​Wilkins. ​ ​194-208. ​ ​Lawrence: ​ ​University ​ ​Press ​ ​of ​Kansas ​ ​2003. Healy Jack. "North Dakota Oil Pipeline Battle: Who’s Fighting and Why." The New York Times 26 (2016). Sobol Laurel. No Dakota Access Pipe Line . CreateSpace Publishing 2017. Waldman Carl. Encyclopedia of Native American Tribes. Infobase Publishing 2014. [...]

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I already wrote my term paper but it clearly was not my best work since I wrote it last minute. I was hoping that you could go back and revise my work taking into account the suggestions from my teacher (which I will add below). I would like to really emphasize the importance in fixing the grammatical errors that are present in my paper such as many confusing sentences, punctuation, and overall the flow of the paper and if it sounds coherent. Also my paper is in Chicago style format so please do not change that all I need to add to it is a Chicago style cover page. Also, my teacher has already gone back and read through my entire paper and has added some of her own comments in the text itself which I have highlighted. She also added these comments: -I like your topic of religious suppression and the Dakota Access Pipeline. My biggest piece of advice would be to get some more in-depth grammar feedback to help make your sentences clearer. I marked several grammar issues, but I think you may want to go to the writing center for help taking this paper to the next level. The very end of your paper was odd for me. I put a note in the PDF, so make sure you read it carefully. Come see me before or after class tomorrow if you feel you need more guidance in that area. Review the entire paper and challenge yourself, how can you improve it? Don’t feel like you need to make it any longer. It’s a good length. -Avoid saying, “the natives.” Wherever possible, refer to specific tribes or use terms like Indigenous people, Native people, Native peoples, Original Americans, First Nations, Indio(a) or Native Americans. -Make sure to capitalize the adjectives Indigenous and Native if they refer to people(s): I found some native fir trees next to the Indigenous American art gallery. -As a writer, you must take my hand and guide me step by step from thought to thought. Make sure your ideas are simply and clearly stated: Bad: “The fun-ness of cats is a point which cannot be easily debated by those who would debate about it. I decided to purchase unto myself one of those small furry creatures known by the title of cat.” (Wordy, complicated nonsense. Thoughts not connected.) Better: Cats are fun. I bought a cat. (Concise and clear, but thoughts still not connected.) Best: In pet magazines, cat owners often mention how fun their cats are. That’s the main reason I decided to buy a cat. (Tells where the info comes from, context. Clear language. Thoughts are connected, the first clearly caused the second.) -Ibid. or Ibid., 12. shouldn’t be the first footnote on any page. For the first footnote on a new page, even if it’s the same source as the one right before, use the shortened footnote: Last name, Short Title in Italics, page #. Example: 7. Basso, Wisdom Sits, 24. -Every word in your whole paper should be Times New Roman font, notes and bibliography included. -Punctuation goes UNDER the “” marks unless you’re using parenthetical citation, which we are not in this paper. Examples: “This is an important point.”7 OR “This is an important point,” she said. OR “This is an important point” (Smith 9). -Make sure your paper is at lease 2200 words long. Any less, and you’ll lose at least one full letter grade. Make sure your paper is no more than 3000 words long. Over 3300 words, and you’ll lose at least one full letter grade. This is a big assignment, but it must also be concise. If your paper is too short or too long, you know who you are. -No … before a quote (or after), unless it’s in the original quote OR you take out words in the middle of the quote. EXAMPLES. The quote you like says, “Overall, that’s cool. It’s an important though often ignored issue many people think about.” Wrong use of … : The book says, “…that’s cool.” OR The book says, “that’s cool…” Right use: The book says, “that’s cool.” OR Right use: The book says, “that’s cool. It’s an[…] issue many people think about.” -Bibliography entries are single spaced (not double) with a single blank line in between each entry. Lines with the author’s name are justified left. All other lines are tabbed under so the authors’ names poke out on the left. -The bibliography starts on a new page. -It is “proper” to capitalize western when it refers to big or specific things and ideas. “The western fencepost was converted into a monument to Western civilization.” -Beware of past tense! Make sure not to talk about Native American peoples as if they are gone or only did things in olden times. -This is a tricky one, tricky even to discuss with you here. Beware talk of the primitive or the old-fashioned. (Several of you made this mistake. Read your work carefully to make sure you correct it.) Native American traditions and culture are always contemporary to every other culture and set of traditions existing during a given time period. They are always modern, whenever “modern” is. This can be a confusing idea because we’ve been taught by colonialism to see Native Americans as technologically, spiritually, and intellectually primitive and backward. Even when it’s phrased as a compliment, it’s still problematic: “We need to get back to the good, old-fashioned Native American ways, how they are living.” Problematic. “We need to learn about current Native American attitudes and practices to help correct parasitic, disrespectful Euro-Western attitudes about nature.” Better. Every culture all the time is made of a combination of new and traditional beliefs/actions/materials. Every culture changes through time. THAT SAID, some authors/people do believe that going back to older, non-industrial styles of living would be superior, and it’s okay to talk about them or quote them. Some authors/people conflate older styles of living or styles of living that reject certain technologies with Native American cultures. It’s okay to talk about those authors/people too, but be aware of what they’re doing. Living in an old-fashioned way and living by Native American beliefs aren’t the same thing. It's also okay to talk about some aspect of how Native Americans lived in the past, but make it clear that's what you're doing, and don't smash it together with what contemporary people are doing or believing like it's all the same. If current ideas have a lineage with ideas from the past, state that explicitly just as you would with a Euro-Western belief. Don't assume the connection is obvious or inevitable. If you need clarification on this point, email me. -Make sure to include a Chicago style cover page. Even though my teacher added a few specific changes that needed more clarification or grammar mistakes to the rough draft, she told me that the entire paper had many grammar mistakes and was not very coherent so please revise it thoroughly. Also, please do not be afraid to delete anything that is written even if you delete an entire paragraph and rewrite it just keep in mind that I don’t want the paper to be any less than 2,700 words and it CANNOT BE MORE THAN 3000. Thank you.

Subject Area: Religion

Document Type: Thesis Statement

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